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Aidan Roberts's avatar

Loving these shorts brother!

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JL Johnson Jr.'s avatar

Thank you, my friend. I’m having fun writing them!

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Ian A.'s avatar

I like these short pieces you've been sharing. They're effective pieces of world-building.

Quick question/critique:

Did you intentionally swap out "shuddered" for "shuttered" to set up the intensity of the storms in the next sentence, or was that a typo?

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JL Johnson Jr.'s avatar

Thank you for the feedback. My hope is that once the number of them grows a bit it’ll be even more useful for readers to get a grasp on the worldbuilding that’s gone into this story/place.

I wish I was as clever as your critique gave me room to be. That was a typo and has been corrected. I wish I’d thought of it first; it’s just a symptom of sneaking in time for these after the kiddo has gone to bed.

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